Talk:Marilyn Maye

Parentage, birth date

That info, where available, regularly appears in BLPs. Where there are multiple versions, it seems reasonable to include those. DavidOaks (talk) 20:24, 3 September 2010 (UTC)

GA Review

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Reviewer: BritneyErotica (talk · contribs) 14:55, 17 August 2023 (UTC)

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	Generally well written. Citation [1] in the short description is unnecessary. "...discovered in 1963 by Steve Allen. She appeared on his television show" could be one sentence "...by Steve Allen, later appearing on his television show." Done "She was named for Marilyn Miller, a 1920s singer and performer" She was named "for" this person or "after"? After...I clarified. "Because Marilyn was underage, her mother kept a book where she recorded the false ages of her daughter so she could remember to tell it to agents" could be reworked to avoid starting a sentence with "because". Done. "...was on the American west coast" West Coast should be capitalised as it is referring to the region. Done "...appearances The Tonight Show with Johnny Carson through the decade. She made her final performance there in 1979" I'd recommend using "throughout" instead of "through". "There" is redundant in the second sentence. Done. "In 1973 she appeared..." A comma after the year would be better. Done. "At nearly age 90, Maye was profiled by Mo Rocca on a 2018 episode of CBS Sunday Morning" I feel as if rewording this to "Approaching the age of 90, Maye was featured in a 2018 episode of CBS Sunday Morning, with a profile by Mo Rocca". Done. "at Carnegie Hall at age 95" Likewise, rephrase from "age 95". Done. "Maye has also done individual vocal coaching and performing lessons for aspiring singers" I'd change the word "done" to something like "provided". Masterclasses and coaching Does this section refer to MasterClass or master class? Please adjust the capitalisation, spelling and phrasing accordingly. Ok, I fixed it. "from the governor of Kansas" Governor should be capitalised. Fixed. "Her long-term partnership with a man lasted roughly ten years" Not sure about this sentence and what it means. Consider integrating it into the surrounding content or rewording it (with the relevant citations). I fixed it. The citations are already pertaining to it so there's no need to add more.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	Could citation [3] could be substituted to a more reliable source other than Theater Mania or at least be less involved within the article? I'm unsure of its reliability. Theater Mania is a site documenting the musical theater and cabaret acts. It is written by entertainment journalists. The staffer for this interviewed Maye for the article.
	2c. it contains no original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.	Some small changes are needed. Overall a well written article. @BritneyErotica: I made the changes you requested. @ChrisTofu11961: If you could just mention again in her early life she was born April 10, 1928 so the first inline citation [1] can be moved there and removed from the short description at the beginning that would be perfect. All the references look live and reliable, copyvios looks good and it reads well. @BritneyErotica: Gotcha. Fixed that as well. @ChrisTofu11961: Great again everything looks good so I'll pass this nomination. I really enjoyed learning about this person so thank you for your efforts! @BritneyErotica: Thanks so much!!

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