Talk:Soltan Hosayn Mirza Safavi

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Soltan Hosayn Mirza Safavi/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Nominator: Amir Ghandi (talk · contribs) 11:50, 6 November 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Borsoka (talk · contribs) 09:46, 8 November 2024 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it well written?

   A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

   B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:

2. Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?

   A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

   B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):

   C. It contains no original research:

   D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

   B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):

4. Is it neutral?

   It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:

5. Is it stable?

   It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:

6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Comments

• ...was dispatched to... By whom? Or, alternatively delete it, stating only that he fought in Kurdistan.
  • Done
• Do we know when his engagement to his cousin occured?
  • In the source it is mentioned after his miliatary contribution
• Introduce Sher Shah Suri.
  • Done
• Introduce Kandahat as a city.
  • Done
• ...his promise... Perhaps "his previous promise to Tahmasp"?
  • Done
• ...to gift the city to the shah... Gift?
  • The source uses the word. I can change it to 'cede'.
• He also had control over Zamindawar and Garmsir. Some context?
• Introduce (with one or two words) Jalal al-Din Yazdi
  • Done
• ..., declaring himself as the King of Kandahar Why not "declared himself king of Kandahar, struck coins..."?
  • Done
• ...the latter's... Whose?
  • Soltan Hosayn's.
    • Clarify it in the article's text.
      • Done
• Introduce Fulad Khalifa Shamlu.
  • There's really nothing known about him
    • Aristocrat, officer, official, courtier, ...?
      • Done
• ...was forced to kill him Personally killed him?
  • Ordered his death
    • Make this clear in the article's text.
      • Done
• Introduce Akbar as Humayun's son and successor.
  • Done
• The two sons eventually defected to India and joined the court of Akbar, where they formed the Bahrami cadet branch of the Safavid dynasty, which became one of the most prominent families in the Mughal court who frequently intermarried with the imperial family and survived for two centuries. Split into two or three separate sentences.
  • Done
• Could you add at least one picture or map? Borsoka (talk) 10:18, 8 November 2024 (UTC)
  • Added a map. Amir Ghandi (talk) 10:58, 8 November 2024 (UTC)

Source review

• Reference 12 refers to a primary source. Could you add reference(s) to secondary or tertiary sources? (I refer to Wikipedia:RSPRIMARY: "Primary sources are often difficult to use appropriately. Although they can be both reliable and useful in certain situations, they must be used with caution in order to avoid original research. Although specific facts may be taken from primary sources, secondary sources that present the same material are preferred. Large blocks of material based purely on primary sources should be avoided. All interpretive claims, analyses, or synthetic claims about primary sources must be referenced to a secondary source, rather than original analysis of the primary-source material by Wikipedia editors."
  • I really tried to find a secondary source but unfortunately the details needed are only present in the primary source.
    • OK. The primary source's use is within the limits set up by our relevant policy. Borsoka (talk) 04:11, 12 November 2024 (UTC)
• All other sources are academic publications.
• Add publisher and place of publicaton to Afshar&Sarafrazi (2018). Borsoka (talk) 05:43, 10 November 2024 (UTC)
  • Done
• References 3 and 6 verify the text in the article and do not contain plagiarism. Does reference 14 verify anything in the text? Borsoka (talk) 04:10, 12 November 2024 (UTC)

  @Borsoka the xodusof brothers is driven from that source

  . Amir Ghandi (talk) 04:56, 12 November 2024 (UTC)

  • typo, exodus

  Amir Ghandi (talk) 04:57, 12 November 2024 (UTC)

All my comments are addressed, so I pass this interesting and well-researched article about a minor actor in Asian history. Borsoka (talk) 05:32, 12 November 2024 (UTC)