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Trying to get this to Good Article but I feel like I'm missing something and would like some suggestions on improvement. GamerPro64 06:53, 28 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Jaguarnik

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Good articles need to pass 6 criteria (WP:GACR), so I'll comment based on those 6 criteria.

Well-written
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Consider making the lead a bit longer - the lead should be a good summary of the article; the lead is too short while also having information that isn't necessary for the lead ("The script was written by having Rebane locking Easton in a cabin to on the incentive of being fed." - this isn't necessary, just write "The script was written by Easton".)

  • Some parts feel awkwardly written and could be rephrased. For example, Davey Perkins, a reporter, visits Sheriff Jones for a story, but the Sheriff says things are quiet. and Davey and Terry drive to a local junkyard where they engage in a romantic encounter. The use of engage here sounds odd, and since they're dating, is it relevant that they have a romantic encounter? This sentence as well Ev, heavily intoxicated, swats at spiders Dan dismisses as hallucinations. should probably have "that" between "spiders" and "Dan". In general, try reading it out loud to see if it sounds good.
  • Originally conceived as an idea from Richard Huff, he and actor Robert Easton, a friend of Rebane, were tasked to write the script. Should probably be "an idea by Richard Huff. Be careful also with phrasing, because it makes it seem as though "he and actor Robert Easton" were originally conceived as an idea.
  • Gross was also critical on the film's script switch "on" for "of"
  • Michael Weldon, in The Psychotronic Encyclopedia of Film, while criticizing the special effects and comparing them negatively to The Giant Claw, he considered the movie to be "Lots of laughs". Remove "he" between "Claw," and "considered"; "considered the movie to be "lots of laughs"" doesn't make sense and can be rephrased as "considered the movie to be funny".
  • thought that the unintentional laughs from the film worn thin quickly. - wore
  • Regarding the episode, Director Bill Rebane thought it was strange, but overall accepted it due to its popularity. - although we know that Rebane is the film's director, I would specify here just in case, because it implies that Rebane is the episode director.
  • During the episode, as Pearl, Brain Guy, and Bobo were out camping, they inadvertently unleash - "while Pearl, Brain Guy, and Bobo are out camping"

In case I missed something, consider also looking at MOS:FILM for more advice for the article.

Verifiable
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Citations look fine, I won't go and check them all individually but each statement has a citation and I don't see any problematic sources. I also checked earwig and it doesn't flag any issues.

Neutral
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No problems as far as I can see

Stable
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No edit wars as far as I can see

Media
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All three images are licensed for usage.

That's my advice for good article, hope your nomination succeeds. Jaguarnik (talk) 19:16, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]